写作任务:
请根据下表提供的信息,描述一下北京一年四季的气候状况。要求60-80词。
季节气候特点春多风，有时会有沙尘暴(sandstorm)夏很热，也下雨，但是没有南方多秋秋高气爽，但是时间很短冬很冷，会下雪
写作分析:
这个写作任务为常见的图表和文字说明相结合的任务类型,其特点是信息量大,条理清楚明了,难度小。
具体分析这个写作任务,我们不难发现贯穿文章的主线应该是时间——季节,在不同的季节有不同的天气状况和气候特点,稍加描述完成任务应该很简单。但正是因为难度不大,反而很难写出好的文章。我们看看初稿。
初稿:
In Beijing, the weather is different in different seasons. In spring, it’s always windy, but it often has sand-storms. That’s bad for people’s daily life. In summer, it’s very hot and it also rains, but it’s not as often as that in the south of China. In autumn, the weather is very beautiful. The sky is blue and clear, and it’s quite cool, people often feel comfortable, but autumn in Beijing is too short. In winter, it’s very cold and it often has heavy snows. That makes people feel very cold.
初稿分析:
初稿从整体上看,基本达到了写作任务的要求。首句高度概括,起了提纲挈领的作用,让读者对全文有了比较明确的理解。接着按春、夏、秋、冬的时间顺序,分别描述了不同季节北京的不同气候状况。所写句子也没有大的语法错误,但文章的缺点也因此暴露,那就是语气过于平淡生硬,基本属于逐句翻译,而且句式雷同,没有变化。这些缺点,正是现阶段学生面临的普遍问题。假如能解决这样的问题,说明大家的英文写作水平有了阶段性进步。 我们看看修改后的成稿。
成稿:
In Beijing, the weather is quite different throughout a year. It is windy in the spring, and sometimes there are sandstorms. That’s not a good time to stay outside for a long time. Like most cities in China, it’s very hot in summer. But in Beijing, it does not rain as much as it does in the south of China. The best season in Beijing is autumn, though it’s too short. It’s quite cool and the sky seems really blue and the air is so fresh. In winter, it’s cold. Sometimes there are heavy snows. Those make people feel much colder.
Powerful sentences:
1. It often rains in summer in the south. / There is a lot of rain in summer in the south. / It’s often rainy in summer in the south.
夏季南方多雨。讲解:英文中描述天气的词很多,而且通常一种天气状况可以用不同的词类(动词、名词或形容词)来表达。例如:rain(下雨；雨)/ rainy(下雨的)；wind (风)/ windy(有风的)；cloud(云)/ cloudy(多云的)；snow(下雪；雪)/ snowy(多雪的)。例如:The sky is filled with clouds today. / It’s cloudy today.今天多云。
2. It’s quite cool and the sky is blue and the air is fresh. 天高云淡,凉爽宜人。
讲解:在表达相同意义或者递进关系的时候,为了行文的需要,可以用并列句来加强气势。例如:
I love my mum and my mum loves me. 我爱妈妈,妈妈也爱我。
He knocked on the door and went in. 他敲了敲门,进去了。
3. That makes people feel much colder.(下雪)让人们感到更冷了。
讲解:make等动词后接动词不定式作宾语补足语时,省去动词不定式符号to。例如:
The boss made the workers work 14 hours a day. 老板要员工们一天工作14个小时。
巩固练习:
请根据下表提供的信息,描述一下武汉市一年四季的气候状况。要求60-80词。
季节气候特点春天气多变，冷暖不定夏很热，延续时间长，经常有阵雨秋凉爽宜人冬严寒，偶然有雨夹雪天气
本期参考范文
The weather in Wuhan is quite different throughout the year. In spring, the weather changes quickly. Sometimes it’s warm and some-times cold. Wuhan is famous for its hot summers. The summer in Wuhan is very long and hot, but there are often showers. The best season in Wuhan is autumn. People feel more comfortable and very cool. But in winter, it’s cold and there is little rain. Sometimes people have rain and snow together. That makes people feel even colder.
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